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Black and Blue by ~umluna:iconumluna:



A felon walked
To Maple Street Square

He walked alone.

He walked to see
The woman that once he did love.

A felon saw, in Maple Street Square
A man, dressed in blue.

A man dressed in blue
Kissed a girl dressed in black
And they sweet-talked each-other silly.
The felon, he left
For he had no girl
And he had no reason to stay.

Questioning himself, the felon at home
Looked at magazine clippings.
Here is love, for $39.95,
Here is how to say you care.

He returned to the square at 3:45
To talk to the woman he loved.
“Kill and die,” he repeated twice
“Is something I would do.
“Killed I have, but only for you.
“Die I would, because….,
“Killed did you
“To me, when you
“Kissed the man in blue.”
©2006-2009 ~umluna
:iconumluna:

Author's Comments

This is a sad story of love and murder.

I would also like to point out the subtle irony, for those of you who have a hard time interpreting my poetry. It is the sixth stanza (second to last). That ought to give you a clue, and let me know what you think.

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:iconmyemfar:
i LOVE that last stanza. Especially the last few lines. Its amazing.
:icongutteralmeaningofgoo:
I understand your IRONY, I just suck ass at metaphors, and not just yours. I commit metaphorical suicide. Yes I would have to say that the last stanza is my favorite as well.

--
Everyone has a photographic memory. Some just don't have any film.
:iconkokkoryuha:
Way to be awesome.
Wow. Powerful with the "confusion" in your verse (... I don't know how else to put, I'm not saying you were confusing, just the confusion in the characters themselves).
<3

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"Time is a great teacher, but unfortunately it kills all its pupils" -Hector Berlioz
:iconselavie:
I love it! Specially the ending! Hehe, Irony is always fun!

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Selavie /say-la-vee/, noun:
1. A smelly kind of cheese.
2. One who has no knowledge of French phonetics.

See also: ignorance, laziness.
:iconryhsode:
Once again, I am amazed at your poetry. This one [i]definitely[/i] rocks the metaphorical socks WAY off. *nods* And I have to agree with everyone about the last stanza, that's amazing. And I love the second to last. I'm not sure if I really get it, but I have an inkling and it was enough to make me love it. :D

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"One can never have too much good wine, beautiful women, or attention." - Talon Karrde
:iconserpent-iris:
Just like the rest of your readers, I loved the way this piece was written and planned out. It's creates a perfect circle in the end, connecting it to the beggining stanzas. Such a well crafted and linear poem can be hard to come by :)

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"THE SOUL NEEDS A CHANCE TO DEVELOP"

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